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ARASHI: Sho and Aiba - Laugh

ACTUALLY WRITING: Day 1

So, the lovely Rinalin has graciously agreed to become a writing coach for myself and literarylemming, as we have both signed up for challenges and have atrophied writing muscles. To that end, she is setting us daily assignments and possibly awarding us points. I'm hoping I can collect enough points for a pony, but we'll see.

Yesterday's prompt was:
Setting
Free write 200 words (or longer) about at setting for a world where the everyone lives to be 150-175 years old. Elaborate on specifics (what room, building, city you'd set your scene in) or the world itself: how government, entertainment, finances, family units etc might function or dysfunction.


And here's what I came up with:

At age 30, Brandy still lives with her parents. Of course she does,
she's still just a child. People rarely move out into their own places
until they're at least 32 or older. And even then people will shake
their heads at the ridiculous choices kids make.

Brandy was born to a mom and a dad, she has 4 half siblings and 2
whole siblings, mostly from her parent's earlier marriage contracts.
She had heard in the old days, people frequently coupled up and stayed
together until they died, but she couldn't even imagine something that
strange. The very idea made her shudder - who would want to be forced
to face and deal with only one person for years and years and YEARS?
The marriage contracts made much more sense - 10, 15, 20 years with
individuals who were past the age of consent (35 or 32 in extreme
cases with parental permission), children or not, as you wanted.
Partings were usually amicable - nothing like the horror stories of
the past of couples who went through divorse. Divorce? Whatever it was
called.

Brandy's first-mother had dropped her off at school this morning, and
been on her way to her third-career. Her mother was still young - she
was only 64, so for her to be on her third-career was unusual, but
mother had rolled her eyes and said something about first-career being
a grave mistake - "much like your second father" - and brushed off all
concerns.

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Awesome and plotty? Not really, but I like it, and I'm WRITING AGAIN.

I was greatly amused by the difference between mine and M's submissions, as hers was dark and involved the end of life and felt very creepy, and mine's all "carefree and stupid at 32!!"

Posted at dreamwidth and lj. Comment somewhere!

Comments

So how many points did you get? ;) I liked it. She has a young voice that fits the story. You know - I'm always thinking if we lived hundreds of years, there's so many languages I'd like to learn and careers to have. I could seriously enjoy a career in meteorology! lol
Yayyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy~~~~~~~~~~~~!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Engaging. I like

Given that this idea is all in the works, this is a fun opening. While it's all exposition, it's done in an engaging way. The terms you used were catchy - first-career and third-career - I can relate. While explains a lot about the setting, but it reveals more about Brandy, a personification of the typical young adult.
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